First draft feedback from Teacher

My teacher said our draft needed a few improvements, these are such things as lighting, titles, music, and our actors.

One of the problems with our draft was the lighting. It got darker towards the end of the film although this film opening would have only happened over a short time in the film. to learn from these mistake we need to film earlier on and allow ourself some more time.

Also we were told our titles were boring so we need to experiment with different fonts, and hopefully find one which suits our film genre. With feedback like this we now have found a font which is decent for the film.

In our draft we didnt include any music so in our film you could hear the background noise of cars, people walking by, etc. To solve this problem we looked at copyright free music and used a programme called garage band. hopefully using these we can find perfect music for our opening.

the last problem was the actors, we used 16 year olds, and why not because it was easy to arrange and no hastle of organising free times with adults, also we understood each other alot easier. Realism got back to us when you wouldnt have 16 year olds handling important files. So our teacher advised us to try and get older actors to add realism to our film.
Using this advice we asked Will's dad if he would feature in our film along with some other adults.